Dream Deep

I printed it out, Binky, so I'll get you a crit written up by Monday. ^_^ Hope it will help!

Thank you Myth, I might just take you up on that offer. ^_~ I really appreciate your crits... heh, now I have to post more so I can drag you ...

Argh, the typos... Curse my typing skills! :wink: And thank you very much for pointing them out, they shall be edited directly. “Put my damn sword down,” Shan told him, ...

Sure thing, Myth, thanks. ^_^ *gives Myth cookies*

Oop, just editing Chapter 2 and I was re-reading your crit... Here. Some words were exchanged, some grabbing and shoving occurred before the meth-maratime started to pull back his arm ...

... No more chance for haikus...? O.o (Imp's "quirked eyebrow of vaguely dubious inquiry"... :wink:)

I can tell. :wink:

That's cause we all love your avatar... XD. I mean, c'mon, it's Mrvica... (you should have heard me explaining all this to David, it was hilarious...) ^_^

Pretty Pros. ^_^ I know a lot of people on here haven't read your other poetry, but I think this is by far one of your very best. :wink:

Even one else seems to have arrived here before me, so I shall merely echo them in saying that thiw was brilliantly done. ^_^

Heh, yeah, got it. Thanks Myth. ^_^ Enjoy the cookies. :wink:

Was his hair wet because he had washed in the bathroom or was he sweating? T'was because of the sweating. :wink: Quite hot, in the auditorium. I love the flashback. ...

Hmm... you do make a good point about the prologue. I'll take a look at it and perhaps do up a quick rewrite. ^_^ (Yeah, the addressing the reader in ...

Then I would have no choice but to believe you. And inform you that no mere immortal weapons can stop me EITHER!! MUAHAHAHA!!!

DD cannot be turned aside by mere mortal means!!! MUAHAHAHA! :twisted: